This is the draft copy of our film intruder. After watching this through with classmates and teachers and getting feedback we have decided to make the following changes based on their comments as an audience: -Change the brightness so the lighting is more low key and fits the genre of horror more effectively.
-Speed up the writing of names in the title sequence as it slows down the whole film. -Make sure we introduce with a production company logo.
-Make sure the jump cut is quicker between the CCTV footage and the Police Interviews.
-Replace the REC buttons with smaller ones, also making sure they all blink at the same time.
-Take out the jump scare of the intruders face at the end of the title sequence as this seems too much like a horror trailer and not a title sequence.
Cambridgeshire police call Center, what’s your emergency?
Mother:
I’ve had another break in,
whilst my child and I were asleep upstairs.
Operator 2:
Okay, what’s the address
where the break in occurred?
Mother:
18 walkway drive, saint
neots.
Operator 2:
Thank you, we will send a
unit now to the address. From my notes I can see this isn’t the first time
you’ve been broken into this month. Is that correct?
Mother:
Yes this isn’t the first
time, and I know it won’t be the last; whoever it is doesn’t steal anything,
only leaves me with the house upturned and ruined. There tormenting me
- A man and a woman meet in a chat room and exchange emails.
-They email eachother everyday without their partners knowing.
-But they do not discuss "details" (meaning private information about themselves).
-They don't realise they pass each other in the street everyday.
-He offers her life advice and helps her through everything not realising who she is.
-They both split up with there partners later on in the film
as they realise they have fallen in love with there email pen pals.
-They finally decide to meet each other at the end.
Second Plot:
- The woman owns a childrens bookshop handed down from her mother.
- The man is a big business man and is opening a large superstore bookshop around the corner
from the womans bookstore.
-The man goes into the childrens bookstore with the kids he is looking after
and gets to know the woman but doesnt tell her, hes her competition.
-She finds out that the man that came into her bookshop owns the large store that is
putting her out of business, and they become business rivals.
-The woman has to close her store as the large store has run her out of business completly.
How the two plots interweve:
-Even though they have met in her bookstore and became enemys they still continue
to email eachother without knowing that they actually know each other.
- Small things and topics start to match from the emails to the conversations
the man and woman have when they see each other.
- They decide to meet one day for a coffee and he waits and sees her, finding out that the woman hes fallen in love with through email penpals is also his biggest enemy,
but he does not tell her.
-He continues to email her as the mystery man, and meeting up with her as the enemy
to make up for what hes done to her business and they become friends.
- He then meets her as her friend during the day and emails her as the mystery
man telling her to meet him in the afternoon.
-She meets him in the afternoon and realises that he was the mystery man and the enemy all along
As a production company we were told to come up with a pitch to present to the class and the teacher about our ideas for our title sequence, this is our feedback from the class and teacher about our pitch.
Strengths:
- The idea of using a splitscreen camera CCTV effect hasnt been tried before
and could be very effective, if done correctly.
- The charactors were well thought out.
- Location fits the narrative of being in a family home.
Weaknesses:
- The narrative wasnt very orginal and was similar to the "Paranormal Activity" films.
- Our production company name "Static Films" also connotes being still and not